W.A.L.T write a narrative
Success Criteria
I know I will be successful when….
The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
The resolution explains how the problem was solved.
Seeks feedback and makes changes to texts to improve clarity and meaning.
Emily's big mistake
3, 2, 1 , WHOOSH
1961 I went into space I felt so shaky my heart was like it was gonna SNAP in half but it didn’t . Why am I going ? My head was feeling so drowsy like I was going to fall. I miss my trainer Bob. I wish I didn’t go in the rocket I wonder why they choose me. I feel so shaky like there was an earthquake on the rocket ship. Then I felt so sleepy that I fell asleep. sleepy . I want to go home not in space. I was sent here to see what would happen to a chimp in space for 65 years. I woke up Where am I ? Then I saw the milky way. It was so beautiful the colours blue purple and stars in it. was lovely until I was passed the milky way then I saw the stars then I saw Home. I was landing
Then I was on
Terra firma
It was hard for me to wake up my face was frozen it didn’t move at all.
Then I jumped out of the rocket and yelled out “BOB! Where are you?” I ran in the house the we booth lived in but he wasn't there. His sister Kaitlyn appeared. I said “Where is Bob? Then I showed her the picture then she said “Bob passed away” A tear came in my eye. So then I was crying so hard that I looked at the picture that cheers me up abit. But I wanted to get REVENGE ! But he was dead so I went away from the house and we to the banana tree to eat some bananas because I was hungry. Then I went to the fountain to get a drink. I thought it was the the world was gonna end but I went to the zoo where my Mum and Dad when then I said MUM, DAD, IT’S ME, EMILY ! The zoo keeper took me and put me in a cage with my mum and dad then I lived really happy. I told my mum and dad that I was space for 65 years. They were shocked. I told them that in space it was lovely but then they asked me a question “Where is your owner Bob?” I said that he passed away but I still have a photo then I showed mum and dad and they said “It's alright, Emily you're with us now”.
(It's not a planet, its our home)
THE END