Emily's big mistake

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Emily's big mistake

3, 2, 1 , WHOOSH

1961 I went into space I felt so shaky my heart was like it was gonna SNAP in half  but  it didn’t . Why am I going ?  My head  was feeling so drowsy  like I was going to fall. I miss my trainer Bob. I wish I didn’t go in the  rocket I wonder why they choose me.  I feel so shaky like there was an earthquake on the rocket ship. Then I felt so sleepy that I fell asleep. sleepy . I want to go home not in space. I was sent here to see what would happen to a chimp in space for 65 years. I woke up Where am I ? Then I saw the milky way. It was so  beautiful the colours  blue purple and stars in it. was lovely until I was passed the  milky way then I saw the stars then I saw Home. I was landing

Then I was on

Terra firma

It was hard for me to wake up my face was frozen it didn’t move at all.

Then I jumped out of the rocket and yelled out “BOB! Where are you?” I ran in the house the we booth lived in but he wasn't there. His sister Kaitlyn  appeared. I said “Where is Bob? Then I showed her the picture then she said “Bob passed away” A tear came in my eye. So then I was crying so hard that I looked at the picture that cheers me up abit.  But I wanted to get REVENGE ! But he was dead so I went away from the house and we to the banana tree to eat some bananas because I was hungry. Then I went to the fountain to get a drink. I thought it was the the world was gonna end but I went to the zoo where my Mum and Dad when then I said MUM, DAD, IT’S ME, EMILY ! The zoo keeper took me and put me  in a cage with my mum and dad then I lived really happy. I told my mum and dad that I was space  for 65 years. They were shocked. I told them that in space it was lovely but then they asked me a question “Where is your owner Bob?” I said that he passed away but I still have a photo then I showed mum and dad and they said “It's alright, Emily you're with us now”.

(It's not a planet, its our home)

                                  THE END