Baby Calf (first draft)

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel?

First draft

My Worst day ever !

It was a beautiful sunny day in  African Savannah is was a early november we were walking across the river bank it is migration because were were . I am glad that I am allowed to stay behind My dad cause he is the lead  bull so when I get lost my dad will find me  with all the the other bulls will save me I am lucky that my dad is a lead bull .  

I went to my mum and my dad  chased the lions  away  until the  lions were gone.So we went to the place were  we are going  

I was still walking across the river bank  with my dad At African savannah.When my dad saw the lion we had to run cause the lions were chasing us until the lion leaped and made me roll down the hill and fall in the water and I got the salty water in my mouth  .Then the  crocodile played tug a war over me until  the lion won  and  I could feel their sharp teeth going in my body.I could hear my dad stomping with the other buffalos coming with the other buffalos so when he came my dad saved me so I went to my mum and my dad  chased the lions  away  until the  lions were gone.So we carried on to the place were  we were going .