Baby Calf Second Draft

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal       

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel

Second draft

My Worst day ever !

It was a beautiful sunny day, in  African Savannah it was a early November,  we were walking across the river bank because it is a migration. I am glad that I am allowed to stay behind my dad because he is the lead  bull, so when I get lost my dad will find me  with all the the other bulls and will save me so it's like a blanket.  I went to my mum and my dad .

 

I was still walking across the river bank with my dad at African Savannah when my dad saw the lions. When I looked my mum and dad left me so I was all alone. I had to run because the lions were chasing me until the lion leaped and made me roll down the hill. Then I  fell in the water.  I got the salty water in my mouth it tasted YUCK! Then came the crocodile SNAP! He tried to EAT me but then played tug of war with the lions, I was getting dragged. The lions won the tug of war then they dragged me up the hill to get away from the crocodile. Then I could hear my dad stomping with the other buffalos coming. When he came my dad saved me so I went to my mum and my dad. They chased the lions away  until the  lions were gone.

I am so happy that my family saved me. Otherwise I would've been dead or badly hurt .

So we carried on to the place  we were going .