The Present

WALT: To write a narrative

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when….

• The title is suitable for the text.

• The orientation tells who the story is about, and when and where the story happened.
• The complication describes a problem and explains what happened next.
• The resolution explains how the problem was solved.

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                The Present

I was in bed at home I decided to get up and have pancakes for break fast . After that went into the bathroom so brush my teeth I was thinking about playing minecraft so I set up my game but it was to bright inside so shut all of the curtains and then I played my game. My mum came in and opened the curtains I said “It's too bright”.  My mum  put a present on the table and said open the present. I kept playing minecraft then I opened the present  and a puppy jumped out of the box. It scared me,  I saw she had three legs so ignored her with madness . She went to a red ball under the cabinet and she banged into the wall then  she grabbed the ball and gave it to me so I kicked the ball and she grabbed it and gave it back so  I said “Mum I'm going  outside to play”. But first I need to get my crutches. I felt happy about having a new friend like me. I wish I didn't ignore her. She  was the best present ever.