My fantasy writing

In writing we have been doing fantasy writing where we need to be in the real world then we go through a portal and it takes us to our fantasy world and my fantasy world is Candy land. Please leave a comment on something I need to improve on and something positive.

W.A.L.T write a fantasy

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when it includes…

• A Description of the fantasy world
• A Problem
• A description of how the problem is solved (resolution)
• The journey back to the real world
• A description about how the character feels

I was at home I needed my sister to log me in for game. So I went into the lounge but she wasn't there .The only thing I saw of here was her phone she was in a call with her friend so I asked her friend where did Charlotte  go her friend said that we went  to go get out of her pyjamas but she went into her room five minutes ago so I hung up the phone to look for Charlotte I went into her room to look for her all I seen was her pyjamas on the floor .Then I saw the wardrobe it had Should I open it ? maybe I could have a peep under the door all I was rainbows maybe I should open it  Ill go in I was in rainbows for 5 minutes then I was at candy land

my childish world In Candy Land it was amazing I wanted to eat everything but first I needed to find Charlotte I found her eating the cotton candy .  We wanted to do something fun so we decided to eat candy at the candy super market then we were so full of candy that We had a sugar rush we went so so crazy but we didn't realise that a giant gingerbread man was sleeping and we accidentally woke him.He came out side he had cotton candy as hair with  m&m for his top and his pants he had no shoe on and he was scary looking.he seen us so he chased us so we needed   climbed up the Candy cane/Tree with cotton candy as the leave. so we hid in the cotton candy until he left then we got stuck. So we jumped into the chocolate lake and then we vanished back to the rainbows after 5 minutes we were all dry back to the wardrobe so we closed it and then the rainbow went away forever until.