My Mid year learning goals

• My learning goals are to show what I have been learning In class.

• I'm going to show my work to my Mum and show her what I have been learning about.

• Here Is my awesome learning goals.  

Hope you enjoy.

My Clay Modell

Thais is the kiwi nostrils they are at the end of the beak so it can smell the dirt to find bugs

this the kiwi beak.

Sharneys Baby calf

W.A.L.T Make improvements to my writing.

My Worst day ever!

It was a beautiful sunny day, in  African Savannah it was a early November,  we were walking across the river bank because it is a migration. I am glad that I am allowed to stay behind my dad because he is the lead  bull, so when I get lost my dad will find me  with all the the other bulls and will save me so it's like a safety blanket.  I went to my mum and my dad .

I was still walking across the river bank with my dad at African Savannah when my dad saw the lions. When I looked my mum and dad left me so I was all alone. I had to run because the lions were chasing me until the lion leaped and made me roll down the hill. Then I  fell in the water.  I got the salty water in my mouth it tasted YUCK! Then came the crocodile SNAP! He tried to EAT me but then played tug of war with the lions, I was getting dragged. The lions won the tug of war then they dragged me up the hill to get away from the crocodile

Then I could hear my dad stomping with the other buffalos coming.

When he came my dad saved me so I went to my mum and my dad. They chased the lions away  until the lions were gone.

I am so happy that my family saved me. Otherwise I would've been dead or badly hurt .

So we carried on to the place  we were going .

By Sharney

Baby Calf Second Draft

W.A.L.T recall  events through the eyes of an animal       

Success Criteria

I know I will be successful when my recount has a

• Title
• Orientation:  When? Who? Where? Why?
• Sequence of events:  What happened? Describe using the senses (hear, taste, see, smell and feel).
• Personal Comment:  How did the events make you feel

Second draft

My Worst day ever !

It was a beautiful sunny day, in  African Savannah it was a early November,  we were walking across the river bank because it is a migration. I am glad that I am allowed to stay behind my dad because he is the lead  bull, so when I get lost my dad will find me  with all the the other bulls and will save me so it's like a blanket.  I went to my mum and my dad .

 

I was still walking across the river bank with my dad at African Savannah when my dad saw the lions. When I looked my mum and dad left me so I was all alone. I had to run because the lions were chasing me until the lion leaped and made me roll down the hill. Then I  fell in the water.  I got the salty water in my mouth it tasted YUCK! Then came the crocodile SNAP! He tried to EAT me but then played tug of war with the lions, I was getting dragged. The lions won the tug of war then they dragged me up the hill to get away from the crocodile. Then I could hear my dad stomping with the other buffalos coming. When he came my dad saved me so I went to my mum and my dad. They chased the lions away  until the  lions were gone.

I am so happy that my family saved me. Otherwise I would've been dead or badly hurt .

So we carried on to the place  we were going .